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I want to live
feeling through the darkness of the night
seeing the path unseen by light
feeling no reason to fear or fight
and everything would be all right

constantly, though, I see
nothing near in front of me
cutting through the oblivion of my dimensions

what the hell are you accomplishing?
(slowly inflicting my wrath)
why the hell are you trying?
(my patience is gone off the map)
where the hell do you think this will get you?
(into the maniacal state I cannot control)
who the hell do you think you are?
(one who is ever so foolishly bold)

So tell me now
seeking of the light
why come to a realm
where if you did would only cause something of a fight?
if you seek a power
in a constantly kept place
soon enough, there will be a fun chase
(and I am never hunted in this race)

what the hell are you accomplishing?
(trying to destroy my mind)
why the hell are you trying?
(for such a unaccomplishing find)
where the hell do you think this will get you?
(a place where I cannot save myself)
who the hell do you think you are?
(someone who's searching for hell)

for a human, one so filled with rage
it's surprised you aren't locked in a cage

finding myself in a state like that
wouldn't help none like this friendly chat

surprising for one such as myself to know?
feeling a painful sense of woe

what the hell are you accomplishing?
(cannot remember anymore)
why the hell are you trying?
(cannot find any reasons for)
where the hell do you think this will get you?
(cannot see why you've come here)
who the hell do you think you are?
(cannot see anything but fear)

now can you fully understand?
(screaming as loud as I can)
nothing is such as it seems
(and no one can hear these screams)
©2008-2009 ~EternalReject
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I like the third stanza and all the ones in the same format. They're based on the same structure but each of them is different and they get progressively... hopeless(?) Can't find the word. Good job.

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Hopeless is about right.

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For those who are cursed with self awareness, there always comes the question "Who am I?"
As always there is a little forced rhyme, and some excessive/roundabout speech in my personal opinion. But the mood is great. I love how the text in parentheses is like another voice.
The inbetween stanazas though, I still like them. They address the second voice, sort of like a mini monologue until the second voice answers.
Really enjoyed it.

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